Sample Grading

Written Coursework

Criterion A:  3/5

Criterion B : 7/10

Criterion C:  4/5

The author shortly explain the introduction of the play and then offers detailed literary analysis of the Richard III and then talked about the plot. However, the author payed a lot of attention on both the analysis of characteristic and on the whole plot. However, it makes me confused on the  whole part, author did not have a good thesis statement to show readers what is his understanding on the play.  The second paragraph is a transitional point in the whole paper,  the author used this paragraph to explain the plot, but there are little analysis on it, which also lack of analysis and understand from author. From paragraph 3 to 11, the author used a lot of quotations from Richard III， which includes the idea of staging and customs on the stage. In my own opinion, it seems too much quotations, I can feel the author wants to explain each quotation specifically but used too many quotations makes me feel not interested on his analysis. After paragraph 13, there is a picture that clearly shows me that where did everyone on the stage stand and how will they arrange the place on the stage so where I give additional one point because it clearly shows me the stage arrangement. Then next paragraph the author began to talk about how could he relates his understanding of the play and the character to be used on his performance, but one shortage is that she did not talk about the interactions between he and his partners, the author only talked about his own feeling and actions on the stage., the play is a group work. The last paragraph the author concluded his performance but the last paragraph is more like an analysis of the play rather than a conclusion, he needs to think about his use of language and structure influencing the whole play rather than focusing on small details. 

Written Coursework 2

Criterion A  4/5

Criterion B   8/10

Criterion C  4/5

In this coursework, the author did not start from telling background information about the Hamlet, the author chose to explain her motivation that why she chose acting Ophella and to make some literary analysis on the character Ophella through her playing, especially on the lines and actions. Then author began to write the literary analysis, the author did a great job on using the quotations to back up her analysis, from paragraph 3—10, the author used these paragraphs to explain how her actions on the stage influenced by her thinking toward the character of Ophella. But one thing the author needed to improve is the connections between paragraph to paragraph. From paragraph three to ten, the author wanted to analyze her action on the stage, maybe the author thought in this way of writing that writes the whole analysis in one paragraph would make readers understand her thinking clearly but she needed to consider she put the her actions in one paragraph, like the paragraph 9, the author in the beginning wrote about the analysis of the lines, but suddenly changes the main topic to analysis of the movement, which in my opinion, she can finish analyzing all the lines then started analyzing movements, which would be more clearly and better. The last paragraph is good as a conclusion paragraph, her language use was good because she talked detailedly and used lots of literary term to analyze, however for the structure of the whole essay I think she should rearrange each paragraph in a good place and find how to make stronger connections between the lines and her action.